<p>Thanks for the opportunity to review this work. The authors are clearly committed to the method and it seems a lot of time and effort went into the study. &nbsp;Giving attention to indigenous ways and beliefs is an important area and they are to be commended. There are, however, &nbsp;several things which I believe would improve the manuscript. They are noted in edit mode in the document and main points are summarized here.</p>
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<li class="show">more detail on your PAR approach in general. Spell the steps out and describe them and how you implemented them fro your reader.</li>
<li class="show">more details on who your participants were, how they were recruited, their views , attitudes and motivations in begin in the study.</li>
<li class="show">Perhaps a researcher positionality paragraph – why the interest and motivation? What were your expectations for the project?</li>
<li class="show">More in the results besides just a list of identified problems. Do you have quotes from participants (i.e., data) you could share?</li>
<li class="show">There are some sections of your reflections that feel more like a literature review. Consider putting in other parts of your paper or breaking them down and tying in more to your findings.</li>
<li class="show">several grammar and style suggestions for more clarity (some sentences need rewording etc.)</li>
<li class="show">Please see editorial comments in document fro more specifics.</li>
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